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[jymwrite]

Ray interviewed in the Feb Illinois Entertainer

Edited by jymwrite, 11 February 2012 - 08:26 PM.

[Defiance]

jymwrite, on 11 February 2012 - 08:26 PM, said:

Ray interviewed in the Feb Illinois Entertainer

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Ray Manzarek article in Illinois Entertainer

Jim Cherry- The Doors Examiner

On the eve of his 73rd birthday former Chicagoan Ray Manzarek and co-founder, keyboardist of The Doors has a cover story and interview in the February 2012 Illinois Entertainer.

You can either say, "On the eve of his 73rd birthday, former Chicagoan and co-founder/keyboardist of The Doors, Ray Manzarek, has a cover story and interview in the ....", or you can say "On the eve of his 73rd birthday, former Chicagoan Ray Manzarek, co-founder and keyboardist of The Doors, has a story and interview in the ...".

The way you have it written is illogical. You need commas. The part in red is the problem.

On another note, what kind of story does Ray make for? Ray is good at writing stories about himself, but I don't think others know Ray enough to write about him. Perhaps 'Cover Story' is just a term for a high profie interview.

P.S. As a point to show how many media people have no clue, consider all those who referred to Ray and Robby's band as 'The Doors' and/or that Ian Astbury was the new singer for 'The Doors'.

Edited by Defiance, 11 February 2012 - 09:14 PM.

[Hamlet]

jymwrite, on 11 February 2012 - 08:26 PM, said:

Ray interviewed in the Feb Illinois Entertainer

Thanks for the link- a great interview.

[Shebang]

Thanks for posting!  Ray Manzarek is always at his best when talking about recording and musical influences.

[jymwrite]

Shebang, on 12 February 2012 - 09:48 PM, said:

Thanks for posting!  Ray Manzarek is always at his best when talking about recording and musical influences.

I agree.

[Defiance]

jymwrite, on 04 March 2012 - 07:10 PM, said:

I agree.

You still haven't fixed it even though I took the time to show you how. You don't have to use what I wrote, but you do need to correct the article.

The way that it is written now, it tells us that the interview is with two different people (i.e. Ray Manzarek and the co-founder of The Doors). If Ray and the co-founder are the same person, you don't need to use the word 'and' after Ray's name.

Edited by Defiance, 04 March 2012 - 09:35 PM.